'Graal Zone' by Nezo - Part 1

Nezo · 12-30-2012

This is a player made up story about the making of Graal Zone, and put it lots of time writing it. Hope you enjoy it

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It was the year 2055, machines once created by Graalians switched sides and started to destroy the beautiful world of Graal.

The machines with their advanced intelligence, they built weapons and planned their invasion in great detail. Back in 2040, these machines survey the world of Graal and knew that Graalians were weak, armed only with swords and guns they knew that have no chance of fighting back the machines.

Then came the night of a falling star. It flashed across the sky just before dawn- a line of greenish light! Some heard hissing sound as it fell.

Soon after dawn, around the fields of the town ' Classic ' there was a large enormous crater. It seems like a large object had made the hole. Sand and gravel had been scattered with every direction. The bushed were on fire, tree were fallen and the ground was so burned black as far as you could see.

It was laying in the ground, it was hot. On its metal it said ' Made in Era '
Everyone was surprised! This object or whatever is from our world of Graal!

Suddenly, out of the blue the object transformed into a machine taller than a house. It was walking! It is alive!!!

People of Graal watched in amazement, suddenly 2 more machines fell on to the town.

In a matter of seconds soldiers of every Graal town came.
The guns from Era, the magic and swords from Classic. The Graal Army formed a circle around the 3 machines. People started to run knowing there would be a huge battle!

Suddenly, the machines started to fire lasers, heat- rays and missiles to the Army! The Army returned the attack! Soon there was a huge epic battle!

6 hours passed, people saw the work of the machines, piles of rubble sat where buildings once stood. Streets were empty except for the people scurrying from hiding place to hiding place, it was hard to imagine that this was the peaceful world that Graalians lived in for many years.

The people of Graal began to wonder about the giant machines. Why are they from Graal? Why are they so powerful? Why are we going to do now?!

THE END OF PART 1

This is the end of part 1, I took around 3 hours writing this. Trying to find better words and phrase for this story. I would end my part 1 here as I don't know if people is going to like it or not. Please let me know if I should continue or if I should stop writing.

If there is any better words or wrong Grammer that I used, feel free to tell me via the comments section. See you guys soon! Peace out!

ridergraal · 12-30-2012

kewl concept

Kiwi · 12-30-2012

It's interesting. It seems more like a brief history than a story though, in the way that there is no character(s) it focussing on or anything like that.

ridergraal · 12-30-2012

but dosent really make any sense who created the machines when did they start having a mind of their own did the machines go back in time if did its the same concept of terminator and why didn't graalians just shut down the machines and isn't era and classic in different time periods? and if it said made in era why is the story abut zone? isn't it in the future

Kiwi · 12-30-2012

Posted by ridergraal

but dosent really make any sense who created the machines when did they start having a mind of their own did the machines go back in time if did its the same concept of terminator and why didn't graalians just shut down the machines and isn't era and classic in different time periods? and if it said made in era why is the story abut zone? isn't it in the future

I think in the universe of his story (how it seems to me) Classic and Era are in the same world and time period, but they have evolved in different areas of the world, and Era is more advanced than Classic. I also think that this is telling us the way Zone is formed (from a clash between Classic and Zone).

ESD_Hyaku · 12-30-2012

Posted by ridergraal

but dosent really make any sense who created the machines when did they start having a mind of their own did the machines go back in time if did its the same concept of terminator and why didn't graalians just shut down the machines and isn't era and classic in different time periods? and if it said made in era why is the story abut zone? isn't it in the future

*facepalm*

Jester Lapse · 12-30-2012

wow dude, it's not a true story unless Zone Cadet is in there somewhere. JS

Lynx · 12-30-2012

Cool concept. Very intertaining

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Next time try pictures ;)

Angel · 12-30-2012

Posted by Lynx

Cool concept. Very intertaining

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Next time try pictures ;)

Add pictures o:

Era News · 12-30-2012

Posted by Jester Lapse

wow dude, it's not a true story unless Zone Cadet is in there somewhere. JS

Why whenever you try make a joke I get the urge to kill myself in the most painful way possible?

Jester Lapse · 12-30-2012

Posted by Era News

Why whenever you make a joke I get the urge to kill myself in the most painful way possible?

I need to make more then :o

Joke ^
*giggle*

Era News · 12-30-2012

Posted by Jester Lapse

I need to make more then :o

Joke ^
*giggle*

Once again, the urge comes

Jester Lapse · 12-30-2012

Posted by Era News

Once again, the urge comes

*another joke*

any closer? ;)

Era News · 12-30-2012

Posted by Jester Lapse

*another joke*

any closer? ;)

This time I feel like killing you

Angel · 12-30-2012

Murder Mystery o:

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Nezo An Asian Join Date: May 2012 Location: japan Posts: 252	'Graal Zone' by Nezo - Part 1 This is a player made up story about the making of Graal Zone, and put it lots of time writing it. Hope you enjoy it Rep, Rate and Comment! It was the year 2055, machines once created by Graalians switched sides and started to destroy the beautiful world of Graal. The machines with their advanced intelligence, they built weapons and planned their invasion in great detail. Back in 2040, these machines survey the world of Graal and knew that Graalians were weak, armed only with swords and guns they knew that have no chance of fighting back the machines. Then came the night of a falling star. It flashed across the sky just before dawn- a line of greenish light! Some heard hissing sound as it fell. Soon after dawn, around the fields of the town ' Classic ' there was a large enormous crater. It seems like a large object had made the hole. Sand and gravel had been scattered with every direction. The bushed were on fire, tree were fallen and the ground was so burned black as far as you could see. It was laying in the ground, it was hot. On its metal it said ' Made in Era ' Everyone was surprised! This object or whatever is from our world of Graal! Suddenly, out of the blue the object transformed into a machine taller than a house. It was walking! It is alive!!! People of Graal watched in amazement, suddenly 2 more machines fell on to the town. In a matter of seconds soldiers of every Graal town came. The guns from Era, the magic and swords from Classic. The Graal Army formed a circle around the 3 machines. People started to run knowing there would be a huge battle! Suddenly, the machines started to fire lasers, heat- rays and missiles to the Army! The Army returned the attack! Soon there was a huge epic battle! 6 hours passed, people saw the work of the machines, piles of rubble sat where buildings once stood. Streets were empty except for the people scurrying from hiding place to hiding place, it was hard to imagine that this was the peaceful world that Graalians lived in for many years. The people of Graal began to wonder about the giant machines. Why are they from Graal? Why are they so powerful? Why are we going to do now?! THE END OF PART 1 This is the end of part 1, I took around 3 hours writing this. Trying to find better words and phrase for this story. I would end my part 1 here as I don't know if people is going to like it or not. Please let me know if I should continue or if I should stop writing. If there is any better words or wrong Grammer that I used, feel free to tell me via the comments section. See you guys soon! Peace out!

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ridergraal airasia game manager Join Date: Nov 2012 Posts: 127	kewl concept

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Kiwi Registered User Join Date: Mar 2012 Location: New Zealand Posts: 2,956	It's interesting. It seems more like a brief history than a story though, in the way that there is no character(s) it focussing on or anything like that.

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Jester Lapse zzz Join Date: Sep 2011 Location: WA USA Posts: 9,232	wow dude, it's not a true story unless Zone Cadet is in there somewhere. JS

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Lynx Magic Panther Join Date: Dec 2012 Posts: 149	Cool concept. Very intertaining . Next time try pictures ;)

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Angel AngelGoesMoo Join Date: Sep 2011 Location: Heaven Posts: 623	Murder Mystery o: