Please post corrections and ideas! This story is written in full by me...Well here you go:


BEEP...BEEP...BEEP!! My eyes gently crack open to the glistening light of the rising sun, the light in my room is overwhelming... some ****er must have opened my shades and set my timer to 5:30 in the morning...on a Sunday! My thoughts wander for a few moments then my eyes drift back over to the alarm. I stare at the green digital numbers, it reads Monday December 5, 6:00 A.M. Oh ****!
Frantically running through the house and falling on my way up the stairs, I somehow manage to go through my normal routine and finish by 6:25 A.M. I grab my toast and run out into the the bright fresh snow. As I left my phone buzzed and reported that there was supposed to be a large blizzard speeding this way. I started jogging towards where I was sure my friend, just friend, Emily would pick me up and drive us to school. Just as I came out of my lonely side street I saw the wind start to pick up and the sky turned from bright blue to a menacing grey color. I walked into the parking lot of the Recreational center and just as I arrived the sleek jet-black BMW pulled up and Emily bade me in. I got in, knocking the snow off of my standard cross country shoes. We drove for a bit happily discussing the soon to come holiday break. Emily being crazy prepared had some home brewed coffee and so we drank and were marry. Soon we arrived at the house of Ariana our combined friend and humorous companion, and she came bursting out of her front door. “Gosh” she says “I’m like so annoyed with my mom, she keeps on taking away my iPhone after school and will only give it back right before school!” Both Emily and I secretly not caring at all respond with “Sucks, to suck.” “Yeah” she says not catching on at all “Now I cant text Sushi.” Emily now caring a little more responds with “Oh that really sucks.” As we drive, the snowflakes gently fell from the sky and I was less and less in tune with their conversation. I looked out through the window, glaring at the houses, I slowly dosed off. Startled I awoke, I was hanging upside down by my seatbelt...Emily who was sitting in the drivers seat was bleeding and Ari who was in the back didn’t look much better. I gave way to an intense pain and passed out. I awoke to a bright light and an old man leaning over my limp body. I quickly made a move to sit up, then the man said “Yar! Ahoy me laddy, slowly now, lay back down.” I did as he asked and then i slowly stuttered to him in return, “Who...are...you?” calmly the old man said “My name is, Bern and I’m the innkeeper of the Balamb Port Pub” Slowly I put my phrase together “Where...am...I...my...friends are....where?” The old man seemed kind enough, he had a white beard, white hair and dark kind looking eyes. He nodded in a direction to my left. I looked over the blue diamond crossed floor and saw Ari and Emily sitting there. They were quietly muttering amongst themselves, then Emily looked up saw me sitting up, and ran over to hug me. It took almost excessive force for me to wrap my arms around her. Then Ariana ran over and we also exchanged hugs. I heard the door to the inn open, Ari and Emily looked out the slightly open door into the main room of the pub and exchanged worried looks. Ari said “Quick Accept this invitation” A note appeared in my hand, it read Do you want to see my guild house? Two boxes were depicted one read “Yes” and the other “No.” I tapped yes and was mystically transported onto a staircase that led up into a tree-house.
“You two have a lot of explaining to do...” I said in a confused fashion. Emily replied “It’s okay, rest, we’ll be safe here” “Safe from what?” I demanded to know so, they explained. Ari and Emily took turns explaining that somehow when we crashed we went to another realm, a parallel universe, where Magic was a normal thing. Emily explained that she crashed because she in an attempt to not hit a person, the car spun and hit the divider that separated two streets, that caused us to flip and hit a person wearing green armor. Ari then explained that the people with green armor, are the baddies, they have stopped at nothing to take over, this land we came to called “Graal.” The defenses of the empire have almost fallen, the empire is ruled by a kind elderly man who goes by the name of Xor. Next in control are the board also called “Admins or Administrators” Then came the people, who held the empire on their shoulders by loving and being loyal to their country. Some were rebellious however and became spies for the baddies those traitors are called “Glitchers” and the baddies most trusted spies are called “Hackers.” After a bit more discussion, Ari said that we have call names too. Hers is Arichi, Emily’s is JiNXeD and mine is Eski.
Emily Explained guilds have popped up all over Graal, each is governed by its own ruler. You display pride for your guild by putting the Guild’s name behind yours. Shortly after I became Eski (Magic) and turns out that I had been recruited to one of the most esteemed guilds. This magical guild has several administrators in it and even more important to me, my friends. They explained that I had to know these things as not to look like a so called “Noob” who are arguably the most destructive force in the land of Graal, partly because of their large numbers and partly because of their supreme stupidness. I asked if I was a noob, they said stat wise yes. My face must of had a look of pure confusion. “Well” Arichi said, “You have been in a coma. I have been here for over three-thousand hours. JiNXeD was also in a coma but awoke almost five hundred hours ago. You on the other had have been here and awake for one hour.” Wow. “Time for ground training.” said Arichi. We got up, I felt very well rested now, and JiNX gave me a sword made out of fine iron, it was balanced perfectly and sat loosely in my hands. They also gave me a long bow carved from the timber of a willow tree. They also gave me some arrows fashioned with tips of steel and fletching made of the finest quality feathers. Then JiNX solemnly declared “Battle training.” They walked through a arch fashioned of wood and disappeared. I followed suit and appeared in the back of that little pub where I spent my first moments in this strange world. I looked on as JiNX and Arichi walked out the back door, again I followed. As I pulled open the door I was reminded heavily of Narnia...I stepped out into the snow and pushed aside a small bush to reveal a small circular clearing dotted with several snowy bushes. For some reason Ari and JiNX where crouching so I feeling they had a reason for doing so I leaned my knees onto the snow swept grass. Right as I bent over...and I mean right as I bent over, an arrow came whistling through the air and soared over my head. Eyes wide we all stared at each other. We then crept through the grass keeping as quiet as possible until we reached a ship. We climbed aboard and Arichi probably sweet talked the captain to let us go to what they called the “Main lands.” As we cast off, I paced around the creaky deck of the old sail ship and wondered. I thought back to...I didn’t remember. There was something scratching the inside of my brain. I needed to know, I yearend to know. There was something and I was sure of it. I just could not wrap my mind abound it. A cool spray of salty water caressed my face, as the wind blew it about. Soon enough it started to snow and I grew weary. I trudged through the now heavy snow and went under-deck. There were several cots and a corner filled with straw. I went up to a nice looking cot and rubbed a large layer of dust from the pillow. I thereafter laid down and dozed off. My eyes slowly opened to multiple voices shouting in the distance and two familiar voices speaking quietly and rapidly somewhere near by. I arose and lo and behold Ari and jiNX were whispering to each-other bathed by lantern light. Both seemed to get irritated and started pointing at some scrap of paper that lay stretched out in front of them. I glared over at them, trying to decipher the blur that was the old looking paper. I stared for a few more seconds and then Ari glanced over, and noticed I was watching. Both of them stopped talking. “You’re up” stated jinx sounding some what happy and a tad nervous. Ari gave me a weary smile. Jinx took up the slip of paper and stored it away in her knapsack. They invited me up and handed me some bread and water. As I bit off a piece of my bread, I went to go to the upper-deck. It was still snowing, and our ship was stopped. The Captain thereafter walked up to me and said “Yar, Ahoy there. We’ve arrived at the docks in the main land. I thanked him and went back down to the cabin, to tell Ari and jinx. They already knew, and i felt quite dumb and left them to pack their things.

To be continued!!!!!!!
Written in full by: Eski Adoot

Please don't steal, thank you! <3  

:0 cool.....didn't manage to read it all sorry i was distracted by a bunch of Rage Comics on Reddit but it looks...um  

I believe your um means long XD  

true  

I like it great work by a fellow chicagoian XD  

Thank ye!  

looks good so far! i got your next part:

i asked arichii what i do in this new dimension. she told me that this world was centered around hats, items, and various customizations to make you look cool. i asked her how to get these items. she told me i had to throw a bomb at some bushes for a bunch of hours if i wanted to get any. i asked her if there was an easier way. she told me that most people were forced to buy gralat packs with their real life money.

you can take it from here!  

Cool story bro?  

Loving it. So intriguing. I lol'd at the Xor part; Its so contridicotry to what people actually think.  

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ESKI I LOVE IT!!!!! its so awesome!!  

to long i didn't read lol  

Posted by Blake

to long i didn't read lol

Tl:dr much?  

Posted by NYN

Cool story bro?

Aw i'm too late, i was going to say that.  

Not trolling but I didn't really like it. You made some grammatical errors and you put in stuff that didn't make any sense. Good idea but needs work.