'Graal Zone' by Nezo - Part 1
 

This is a player made up story about the making of Graal Zone, and put it lots of time writing it. Hope you enjoy it :) Rep, Rate and Comment!

It was the year 2055, machines once created by Graalians switched sides and started to destroy the beautiful world of Graal.

The machines with their advanced intelligence, they built weapons and planned their invasion in great detail. Back in 2040, these machines survey the world of Graal and knew that Graalians were weak, armed only with swords and guns they knew that have no chance of fighting back the machines.

Then came the night of a falling star. It flashed across the sky just before dawn- a line of greenish light! Some heard hissing sound as it fell.

Soon after dawn, around the fields of the town ' Classic ' there was a large enormous crater. It seems like a large object had made the hole. Sand and gravel had been scattered with every direction. The bushed were on fire, tree were fallen and the ground was so burned black as far as you could see.

It was laying in the ground, it was hot. On its metal it said ' Made in Era '
Everyone was surprised! This object or whatever is from our world of Graal!

Suddenly, out of the blue the object transformed into a machine taller than a house. It was walking! It is alive!!!

People of Graal watched in amazement, suddenly 2 more machines fell on to the town.

In a matter of seconds soldiers of every Graal town came.
The guns from Era, the magic and swords from Classic. The Graal Army formed a circle around the 3 machines. People started to run knowing there would be a huge battle!

Suddenly, the machines started to fire lasers, heat- rays and missiles to the Army! The Army returned the attack! Soon there was a huge epic battle!

6 hours passed, people saw the work of the machines, piles of rubble sat where buildings once stood. Streets were empty except for the people scurrying from hiding place to hiding place, it was hard to imagine that this was the peaceful world that Graalians lived in for many years.

The people of Graal began to wonder about the giant machines. Why are they from Graal? Why are they so powerful? Why are we going to do now?!

THE END OF PART 1


This is the end of part 1, I took around 3 hours writing this. Trying to find better words and phrase for this story. I would end my part 1 here as I don't know if people is going to like it or not. Please let me know if I should continue or if I should stop writing.

If there is any better words or wrong Grammer that I used, feel free to tell me via the comments section. See you guys soon! Peace out!

kewl concept

It's interesting. It seems more like a brief history than a story though, in the way that there is no character(s) it focussing on or anything like that.

but dosent really make any sense who created the machines when did they start having a mind of their own did the machines go back in time if did its the same concept of terminator and why didn't graalians just shut down the machines and isn't era and classic in different time periods? and if it said made in era why is the story abut zone? isn't it in the future

I think in the universe of his story (how it seems to me) Classic and Era are in the same world and time period, but they have evolved in different areas of the world, and Era is more advanced than Classic. I also think that this is telling us the way Zone is formed (from a clash between Classic and Zone).

*facepalm*

wow dude, it's not a true story unless Zone Cadet is in there somewhere. JS

Cool concept. Very intertaining :).
Next time try pictures ;)

Add pictures o:

Why whenever you try make a joke I get the urge to kill myself in the most painful way possible?

I need to make more then :o

Joke ^
*giggle*

Once again, the urge comes

*another joke*

any closer? ;)

This time I feel like killing you

Murder Mystery o:

Nezo, you think a lot like me. I, too, was thinking about writing backstory for Zone, and that Graal is one huge world with different areas with different evolution. Classic and Era live on the main planet, Zone is a starship above the planet, which manufactures portals to artificially made Player Worlds.

Frankly zone hints at that by showing the classic map as on the plant surface from the zone sky city....

That isn't the classic map, it's the original Shangri La map.

Unless thing "shangri la" map is identical to the classic map in about every single way then I think your wrong. Im lookin' at it right now and I see sardons tower, deadwood, yorktown, swamptown, mod fort.. ect.....

@Kiwi the map was switched from Shangri La to Classic. u_u

Hey guys, many of you wanted my second part, however I am busy with school, etc.
I am a newly selected student leader for my school and I have many jobs to do.
So I am not able to continue writing the other parts.
I would still be Morderating the forums at Mooproductions.webs.com
And I would check the daily news on iZone.
Hope you see you guys soon, peace out! And a happy new year!

Oh, so it's changed. My mistake.

I think the 3,000 year war with the evolving baddies sounds really good, but this one sounds cool too. Although it must be kept in mind, classic and era are supposed to be the same place, just different eras. Zone is supposed to take place in a space station above the futuresque world of graal.

And the surface map should be era then, not classic. Why would medieval graalians have a space station?

Maybe they don't know it's there. Disguised in the sky.

Nice story.

Describe the battle. I'm a **** writer but it needs to be addressed.
Example:
The Graal Army fought valiantly against the foreign machines. The fireballs and magic of the Classic Graalians engulfed the battlefield in flames and a thick heavy smoke. The knights swords proved to have no effect on the well built monsters and the Umbrellas, daggers and guns of the people of Era were destroyed. The monsters shot their lasers faster than the Classic Mages. Their machine guns piercing the poor Graalians. The cries of men and woman...men and woman that would never return to their homes...their families. Among them a child named (insert name here) had just seen his/her family slaughtered by the evil machines.
INTRO FOR MAIN CHARACTER

Hi ill do it but I can't do the inter view on email can I do it in zone?

Lol.

This made me laugh but nice story :)